The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3 (eBook)

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3
The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3 eBook Cover, written by The Mad Hatter
Author(s)	The Mad Hatter
Series	The Incubus Journal
Publisher	Amazon Digital Services
Publication date	June 19, 2016
Media type	eBook
Length	8 Pages
ASIN	B01HBXVNAO
Preceded by	The Incubus Journal: Chapter 2
Followed by	The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4

For other uses of the word Incubus, see Incubus (disambiguation).

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3, is an eBook written by The Mad Hatter. It is the third work in the Incubus Journal series by this author. In this work the character Chris Douglas is transformed into an Incubus.

Overview

• Title: The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3
• Author: The Mad Hatter
• Published By: Amazon Digital Services
• Length: 8 Pages
• Format: eBook
• ASIN: B01HBXVNAO
• Publishing Date: June 19, 2016

Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki

• The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1
• The Incubus Journal: Chapter 2
• The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4
• Incubus Journal Chapters 1-4: What Happens When You Become A Literal Sex Demon?
• The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5
• The Incubus Journal: Chapter 6
• Incubus Journal: Complete

Plot Summary

Douglas's powers continues to grow and so does the changes to his body. After spending a little time considering his powers, fate or something else, decides that he needs to use them again on some unsuspecting delinquents.

Book Review

The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on June 21, 2016

Chris continues to change, his powers and knowledge evolving as time goes on. An encounter with a mysterious woman leads to the discovery that the universe abhors a vacuum and Chris will be the one to fill it… in more than one way.

Much like the first and second works in the series, the third leaves a lot to be desired with regards to editing overall. There is a plot, but getting to it through the odd writing style, the uneven dialogue, and, yes, the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

Each work is so very short as to not allow for a lot of development, but irregardless of that, there is erotica. The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well.

The third work in the series has a number of issues, not the least of which is the appearance of Rose, a succubus, who speaks to the main character, touches him, but isn’t described. It’s unclear if she is actually there or not and this makes for a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

That said, the writing needs a lot of editing because the story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues as well. There are a series of transformations as well, but they don’t make a lot of sense either.

While it’s clear that a measure of justice is done in what happens, the aftermath is confusing and unclear. I have the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

There isn’t any erotica to speak of really in the third work, which means that the story has to carry things along. But it really doesn’t. Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There is a hint as to what’s going on, a direction for the series to go in. But this part of the series is as short as the rest, so there’s no time to have more than cardboard cutouts for the minor characters before the story ends with a question that leads to the fourth work in the series.

One out of five pitchforks.

I really want the author to go back and edit this entire series into a single volume. I’d like them to edit the story so that it flows better, reads better and there is, overall, as much story as there is erotica. There is a balance that’s needed to bring out what is, really, an interesting story, but it just can’t really come to the fore here.

External Links

• This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com