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Holy Temptation (eBook)
| Holy Temptation | |
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 Holy Temptation eBook Cover, written by Gianna Quinn | |
| Author(s) | Gianna Quinn |
| Publisher | Blue Magic Publishing |
| Publication date | October 31, 2016 |
| Media type | eBook |
| Length | 16 Pages |
| ASIN | B01MFFDIRE |
For other uses of the word Succubus, see Succubus (disambiguation).
Holy Temptation is an eBook written by Gianna Quinn. In this work the character Lilith is a Succubus.
Overview
- Title: Holy Temptation
- Author: Gianna Quinn
- Published By: Blue Magic Publishing
- Length: 16 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01MFFDIRE
- Publishing Date: October 31, 2016
Plot Summary
Rodrik is a newly forged paladin that has come to a small town that is being haunted by a demon. He has agreed to assist the villagers, however when night falls, the succubus emerges. Can Rodrik's holy magik s stand up against the seductive might of the succubus or will Rodrik fall for this Holy Temptation? Read on and find out!
Book Review
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on February 7, 2017
Rodrik travels to a town on first first mission to do good. But before he can rid them of a demon in their midst, a lovely woman comes calling in the night. But not all that appears lovely is quite so, and when Lilith reveals herself, Rodrik is trapped with nowhere to run and only one thing to count on.
The work is a hot flash, with the actual erotica appearing in the latter third of the work. Being that it is short, there’s not much in the way of plot, character development or for that matter, heat in the erotica as well. The story stumbles around, trying to find itself and by the time it does so, well over half the work has passed by.
While much of that comes from the setting up of the story, that’s rather odd in that events come to pass, mentioned out of hand, but with little in the way of a resolution by the time the story comes to a close. The writing tries to tell the story, but a number of tense changes, grammar issues and odd dialogue structure at times make the story difficult to read, never mind enjoy.
Lilith, the succubus of the work, attempts to be seductive, but soon falls into the trap of being very close to being a stereotypical succubus in character, which disappointed me. More so, the way she spoke didn’t have much in the way of seduction in play, bordering on being almost rote in what she cries out for, over and over again with Rodrik.
The erotica’s heat is muted by the speed at which things unfold, the seeming lack of emotion from both characters, even when Rodrik knows what Lilith is doing to him. Some of that can be said to be Lilith’s control over him, but that doesn’t give much to telling why Lilith is there, what her purpose is and most of all, what happens between herself and Rodrik.
It’s the climax of the work, and the very last paragraph, that offers something really interesting, but it’s not at all explored. It’s a tease, suggesting there’s more to the story, but in doing so that removes the point of the climax, setting it off and away, not to be explained, or told. That’s a real shame because in spite of the overall difficulty in how the story is told, that very last page caught my attention, far more than the erotica or anything else did.
The work needs a serious editing for tense, structure and most of all the dialogue to make it sounds real rather than robotic at many points. The thing is, the last page gives a wonderful mystery and promise to explore, but the author, as of this review, has not continued this story. It’s a shame really because the idea of a paladin chasing a succubus, the two circling around each other, really interests me.
Three out of five pitchforks.
As the opening to a longer work, the story could be expanded, given more depth and give both Rodrik and Lilith more to their characters. There is something here, it’s just not told as it could have been and that’s more the shame.