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The Devil's Daughter
The Devil's Daughter eBook Cover, written by Lola Grey
The Devil's Daughter eBook Cover,
written by Lola Grey
Author(s) Lola Grey
Publisher Amazon Digital Services
Smashwords
Publication date November 27, 2012
Media type eBook
Length 12 Pages
ISBN 9781370911998
ASIN B00AEK5W2W

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The Devil's Daughter is an eBook written by Lola Grey. In this work the character Lilith is a Succubus.


Overview

  • Title: The Devil's Daughter
  • Author: Lola Grey
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services & Smashwords
  • Length: 12 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B00AEK5W2W
  • IBSN: 9781370911998
  • Publishing Date: November 27, 2012


Plot Summary

David is feeling down after being rejected by his college crush. But when he and his best friend discover a mysterious box, they unwittingly draw the attention of a lustful demon that may be too hot to handle!


Book Review

The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on April 30, 2017


David finds a box and one it is opened, he discovers a woman calling herself Lilith who turns out to be a succubus, and a hungry one at that. Every little dirty thing he can think of, Lilith’s more than willing to try but when David’s best friend gets in on the fun and games, that’s when Lilith gets her way.

The work is a hot flash, with a bit of plot and very little character background or development overall. That’s not to say either David or Lilith are cardboard characters however. There’s just enough told to make things interesting, to express what drives them both before the story devolves into a pair of sex scenes.

Before that happens however, the time spent in Lilith’s appearance, the teasing of what she is, how she came to appear, left some needed story telling to the side in the rush to get to the erotica. How the box that summons her got where it is never gets explained. How it works, exactly is a vague thing, not explored. Lilith’s sexual hunger is very strong, overwhelming David, and later his best friend and that worked well. But there’s more time spent in Lilith entwined with David than there is in telling her story and that I felt was something that needed to be done.

The erotica is a pair of scenes, which have some heat in them, but could have been a lot more. There’s a feeling that the author started on the erotica and then sort of stepped back from it. What’s left is what I think of as “erotica light” in which one’s imagination has to fill in a lot of the missing bits and here are a lot of them here.

The story is told mainly from David’s perspective and as such there’s really nothing told about what Lilith thinks, how she feels, what she wants. There are hints which mostly are her expressions, the look in her eyes, the demands she makes of the other characters. She’s very much in control of the moment she has, but that’s not explored or played with.

The work ends in a way that suggests there could be more story to be told, more encounters with Lilith, perhaps the promise of something else going on between her and David. I’d like to see that with the hope that Lilith remains who she seems to be and not suddenly turn out being stereotypical. There’s a really good hook here, it should be used for something more than this.

While the writing is good, the dialogue needs some work, mainly to make the male characters a little less “wooden” in the tone of their voices. The erotica needs more heat as well. But most of all, Lilith herself needs to be less of a mystery and more of a presence. Her story is one that interested me, and only having a few scattered hints didn’t satisfy that.

Three out of five pitchforks.

There’s a good deal of storytelling, the characters have something the story can work with, but Lilith being more of a sex toy, if a demanding one, was disappointing. I think this would make the basis for the opening of a longer story, following Lilith, finding out more about her. Saying she’s a succubus and nothing else is disappointing. There’s something interesting about her and exploring that aspect of her character I think would have led to something far better than just the porn scenes that did.


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