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Turned Into A Bimbo By A Demon (eBook)
| Turned Into A Bimbo By A Demon | |
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 Turned Into A Bimbo By A Demon eBook Cover, written by The Pen Writer | |
| Author(s) | The Pen Writer |
| Publisher | Amazon Digital Services |
| Publication date | April 15, 2017 |
| Media type | eBook |
| Length | 21 Pages |
| ASIN | B06ZYQG82N |
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Turned Into A Bimbo By A Demon is an eBook written by The Pen Writer. In this work the character Lilith is a Succubus.
Overview
- Title: Turned Into A Bimbo By A Demon
- Author: The Pen Writer
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 21 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B06ZYQG82N
- Publishing Date: April 15, 2017
Plot Summary
Rebecca Edwards is your not so ordinary twenty one year old woman. Since birth she has been raised to become the strong willed businesswoman that her father wants her to be. She's serious minded and has no time for play and is sick of it. The stress is getting to her and she's about to collapse from the burden of responsibility that rests on her shoulders.
By chance she meets a mysterious woman named Lilith. The woman is able to change everything about anyone with a snap of her fingers. When Rebecca meets her, her mind snaps. The stress has finally taken its toll on her mind and body. She just wants to be free from all responsibility. Lilith can give her what she wants but it will come in the form of a big, busty and sexy blond bimbo. There is no turning back for Rebecca when she decides to become that which she was always meant to be.
Book Review
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on April 21, 2017
Rebecca’s life is a bit of a mess in that the world expects everything from her and it’s becoming too much for her to bear. A friend takes Rebecca to meet Lilith who offers her an escape at a cost, one that comes with strings attached. Sometimes the deals you make aren’t exactly the deals you get, but whatever happens, there’s no going back when the deal is done.
The work is a series of vaguely interconnected scenes following Rebecca as she struggles with her life, her world and eventually is drawn into the presence of Lilith. There’s really little erotica in this work as it’s mostly concerned with various kinds of transformations, and that’s where the problem is.
If this was just a succubus transforming a woman into a bimbo, that would give the work some focus. But what happens is a wish-mash of bimbo transformation, gender change, vore, mind control and several other themes that create a confused story. It jumps from one thing to the next, not really focusing on telling each story too deeply. Similarly, the events before the meeting with Lilith rush by, are confused, and just let me wondering what the point was.
Lilith herself appears but fleetingly as well. She could well be a succubus, all things considered, but it’s hard to pull her story out of the spelling mistakes, grammar issues and editing problems that run throughout this work.
There’s a story here, somewhere, but it’s very hard to find and more, it’s very difficult to enjoy. I’d suggest the author figure out what story they are trying to tell and rewrite this work to do so. If there’s something more to Lilith than what’s in the story, it would be good to see, but somehow I just can’t see that and I wish I could.
The work is scattered and without any real focus which makes for a difficult read. There’s a vast mixture of various kinks and themes which don’t really connect well together. Beyond that, the work needs a serious editing for all of the spelling mistakes, word errors and dialogue that just sounds completely wrong.
One out of five pitchforks.
The author needs to find the core of this work and tell that before anything else. More so, all of the little details that, in the end, mean very little, if anything, need to be edited. The dialogue needs life, the narration really needs to be cleaned up a lot.
Perhaps the author was too much in a rush to tell this story. At one point the work was published, then removed, then published again. I thought it might have been edited, but the two copies I read seem to indicate that didn’t happen. If the author can find their footing and tell the story, expand the characters and add some heat to the erotica, this could be something interesting. Right now I can’t say it is.
External Links
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com - No Longer Available